我写了一篇作文,谁帮我看看,找些错误(我才初一啊)I have a dreamWhen l am boy,l want to be an astronaut.I think it is very interesting and funny.but now I am diffident,I think it is too hard.I have not any hope.So I have a new dream:

我写了一篇作文,谁帮我看看,找些错误(我才初一啊)I have a dreamWhen l am boy,l want to be an astronaut.I think it is very interesting and funny.but now I am diffident,I think it is too hard.I have not any hope.So I have a new dream:
我写了一篇作文,谁帮我看看,找些错误(我才初一啊)
I have a dream
When l am boy,l want to be an astronaut.I think it is very interesting and funny.but now I am diffident,I think it is too hard.I have not any hope.So I have a new dream:I will be an economist.Mybe you are surpised why I want to be an economist.let me tell you:In winter hoilday,I read a book (货币战争).It talks about the economics’s history and fact.It is really interesting and exciting.But it is too depth and mybe you will be a poorman.I read this book all hoilday,it is give me the true way to the confidence.And it is also difficult.But I do not give up.I think I will be a good economist.Beause that is my favourite job.When I have a dream,it can tell me how to be success.So at the first I will study in XiaMen University or RenMin University then I will go abroad to learn more.Next,I will work in a bank to be a richman .At last I will work at Wall Street.I will make my life colorful,that is my last dream.I look forward to the future with confidence.

我写了一篇作文,谁帮我看看,找些错误(我才初一啊)I have a dreamWhen l am boy,l want to be an astronaut.I think it is very interesting and funny.but now I am diffident,I think it is too hard.I have not any hope.So I have a new dream:
I have not any hope这句错
应改为：I don't have any hope
It talks about the economics’s history and fact
fact改为facts
it is give me the true way to the confidence这句错
应改为：it gives me the true way to he confidence
.So at the first I will study in .
at the first改为at first
At last I will work at Wall Street
at Wall Street改为in the wall street
你自己再看一下~
作文写的不错~

1.第一句是was a boy
2.第二句是i wanted，过去时
3.第二行应该是i don't have any hope
4.第四行是holiday，拼错了
5.第五行是deep，形容词
6.第六行all holidays，复数。give前面没有is，用gives