帮忙润色一篇essay,现在只是first draft（在线等,急用）Stock Market and TeenagersNowadays,stock market is no longer a strange phrase.It provides more opportunities for people to make money and increase the quality of their lives.Everyda

帮忙润色一篇essay,现在只是first draft（在线等,急用）Stock Market and TeenagersNowadays,stock market is no longer a strange phrase.It provides more opportunities for people to make money and increase the quality of their lives.Everyda
帮忙润色一篇essay,现在只是first draft（在线等,急用）
Stock Market and Teenagers
Nowadays,stock market is no longer a strange phrase.It provides more opportunities for people to make money and increase the quality of their lives.Everyday,we can see the latest quotations from the stock exchange on newspapers; also,many people are investing in a small way in the stock market,even some teenagers.Stocks are simple.All we do is buy shares in a business with good management and promise.I have a friend,who started to invest in the stock market when she was a secondary school student.She enjoyed doing it,and her parents supported her to try to sow the seeds of her own future.Although the stock market is full of risks,it encourages young people to learn to exist in a highly competitive society.
As a matter of fact,investing in the stock market is a good attempt,which helps teenagers assimilate into the community.We are young,so we can afford the result,even though the stocks are much more risky than other things.Possibly,the share prices could go down,but if it goes up,we would have more money to strive for what we want in the future.We are not children anymore,so we should be responsible for our lives,thinking about what we can do now.Society is developing.If we just stay in the childhood and be protected by our parents,we won’t grow up.Maturation cannot be accomplished without closing to the reality.
On the other hand,investing in the stock market could nourish well-rounded individuals.Good psychology,proper investment methods and positive attitude are necessary factors for a person to be a successful investor in the stock market.Therefore,when we learn how to invest,we will also receive a correct outlook on our lives.For instance,before we consider which stock should be chosen,we must know the performance and the background of the company.In this way,it strengthens the ability of dealing with things for us.
As we see,studying is not the only one way to be successful in the present.For parents,they have to give us plenty of space with proper support,so that we could acquire ample opportunity to perform on the stage.And for teenagers like me,we should realize that everything comes to people who wait.Therefore,stock market is a good springboard,which supply social experience for the teenagers.

帮忙润色一篇essay,现在只是first draft（在线等,急用）Stock Market and TeenagersNowadays,stock market is no longer a strange phrase.It provides more opportunities for people to make money and increase the quality of their lives.Everyda
Stock Market and Teenagers
Nowadays,stock market is no longer a strange phrase and becomes a common topic in the daily life.It provides more opportunities for people to make money through financial investment in the hope of improving the quality of life.Everyday,we can see the latest quotations from the popular media:TV,radio,newspapers,etc.More and more ordinary people become stock investors,even some teenagers (through their parents).Stock investment is very simple.All we need to do is open an account through a stock-trading agent and buy the desired shares of a public-listed business.I have a friend,who started to invest in the stock market when she was a secondary school student through her parents' trading account.She enjoyed doing it,and her parents supported her for the purpose of sowing the seeds for her own future.Although the stock market is full of risks,it is a very good place to educate young people on risk and oppurtunities.It alos helps them to learn some survival skills in a highly competitive society.
As a matter of fact,investing in the stock market is a good learning process,which helps teenagers assimilate into the business community.We are young,so we can afford whatever result,even though the stocks might be much more risky than other means of investment.In reality the share prices fluctuate every second.It might go up and down sharply.However if it goes up as a trend in the long run,we would have more money to strive for what we want in the future.We are not children anymore,so we should be responsible for our future,thinking about what we can prepare now for the future.Society is developing.If we just stay in the childhood and be protected by our parents,we won’t grow up.Maturation cannot be accomplished without closing to the reality.
On the other hand,investing in the stock market could nourish well-rounded individuals.Good psychology,proper investment methods (select the right stock in the right time at a right price),and positive attitude with a long-term mindset are necessary factors for a person to be a successful investor in the stock market.Therefore,when we learn how to invest,we will also receive a correct outlook on our lives.For instance,before we consider which stock should be chosen,we must know the performance and the background of the company.In this way,it strengthens the ability of dealing with things for us.
As we see,studying is not the only one way to be successful in the present.For parents,they have to give us plenty of space with proper support,so that we could acquire ample opportunity to perform on the stage.And for teenagers like me,we should realize that opportunity onlu comes to people who have prepared for.Therefore,stock market is a good springboard,which provides people,including teenagers,with real financial experience on risk and opportunity.

Stock Market and Teenagers
Nowadays, stock market is no longer a strange(这个觉得有待推敲) phrase. It(which) provides more opportunities for people to make money and (to improve?) increase the quality of...

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Stock Market and Teenagers
Nowadays, stock market is no longer a strange(这个觉得有待推敲) phrase. It(which) provides more opportunities for people to make money and (to improve?) increase the quality of their lives. Everyday, we can see the latest quotations from the stock exchange on newspapers; also, many people are investing in a small way(中文意义是？) in the stock market, even some teenagers（前边怎么了，后边跟even?）. Stocks are simple. All we do is (to)buy shares in a business（transaction） with good management and promise. I have a friend, who started to invest in the stock market when she was a secondary school student. She enjoyed doing it, and her parents supported her to try to "sow the seeds" of her own future. Although the stock market is full of risks(risky?), it encourages young people to learn to exist(survive) in a highly-competitive society.
As a matter of fact, investing(investment) in the stock market is a good attempt(？), which helps teenagers assimilate into the community（？）. We are young, so we can afford the result（感觉不太对：afford to... ）, even though the stocks are much more risky than other things. Possibly, the share prices could(would) go down, but if it goes up, we would have more money to strive for what we want in the future. We are not children anymore, so we should be responsible for our lives(ourselves), thinking about what we can do now. Society is developing. (这句用it作主语)If we just stay in the childhood and be protected by our parents, we won’t（will never) grow up. Maturation cannot be accomplished without closing to the reality.
On the other hand, investing(investment) in the stock market could nourish well-rounded individuals. Good psychology, proper investment methods and positive attitude are necessary (去掉factors)factors for a person to be a successful investor in the stock market. Therefore, when we learn how to invest, we will also receive a correct outlook(查outlook搭配) on our lives. For instance, before we consider which stock should be chosen, we must know the performance and the background of the company. In this way, it strengthens the ability of dealing with things for us.
As we see, studying is not the only one way to be successful in the present. For parents, they have to give us plenty of space with proper support, so that we could acquire ample opportunity to perform on the stage. And for teenagers like me, we should realize that everything comes to people who wait. Therefore, stock market is a good springboard, which supply social experience for the teenagers.
修改建议：1. 查经济专业术语。2。整合前后句，如有逻辑关系，添加连词，或成从句。3。有些词在推敲一下。

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