哪为英语强人看看我的作文!谢这是篇自我介绍Dear teachers；Good morning It is my pleasure to have the opportunity for this interview and I hope I can make a good performance today.Now let me introduce myself briefly.My name is li ho

哪为英语强人看看我的作文!谢这是篇自我介绍Dear teachers；Good morning It is my pleasure to have the opportunity for this interview and I hope I can make a good performance today.Now let me introduce myself briefly.My name is li ho
哪为英语强人看看我的作文!谢
这是篇自我介绍
Dear teachers；
Good morning
It is my pleasure to have the opportunity for this interview and I hope I can make a good performance today.
Now let me introduce myself briefly.
My name is li hongxuan,I am 16 years old and I come from jiujiang a very beautiful small city .Maybe my English oral is not very good but I believe that I can do it very well in the future.I think Adversity makes a man wise,not rich.
I am a diligence student ,especially when I do the things I am interested in i will try my best to finish it no matter how difficult it is.And I am optimistic and confident,In my spare time,I often doing some sports,such as basketball,swimming.I believe that nothing is difficult to the man who will try.Thanks for giving me the chance!

哪为英语强人看看我的作文!谢这是篇自我介绍Dear teachers；Good morning It is my pleasure to have the opportunity for this interview and I hope I can make a good performance today.Now let me introduce myself briefly.My name is li ho
挺好的,比较流畅
Maybe my English oral is not very good but I believe that I can do it very well in the future.
这句改成这样：Currently my oral English maybe not perfect,but I believe that I can do it better in the future.

May the eternal sun shines upon you, our brethren.

首先我不知道这个是书面的还是口头的,前头的早上好值得商榷.
a very beautiful small city 前应该有停顿
oral有些多余
I often doing some sports应该是do
I believe that nothing is difficult to the man who will try应该是that is nothing d...

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首先我不知道这个是书面的还是口头的,前头的早上好值得商榷.
a very beautiful small city 前应该有停顿
oral有些多余
I often doing some sports应该是do
I believe that nothing is difficult to the man who will try应该是that is nothing difficult
Thanks for giving me the chance! 直接说thanks就好了.不卑不亢,总统竞选也不会说的那么直接
暂时只看到这么多,但是不得不说你16岁就有这么好的英文水平真的很不错,你一定会很成功的.good luck

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English oral 改成oral English
倒数第五行 things 改成thing 或者把下面一行的it、is都改为them 、are
basketball前面加playing
其它的都还可以，功底不错，要注意标点符号

Maybe my English oral is not very good建议改成Maybe my oral English is not very well.
I am a diligence student——dilligence改成dilligent
I often doing some sports——doing改成do