帮我检查一下我写的这篇英语作文（初一的）“My family day”My family dayMy father usually gets up at six thirty.But my mother usually gets up at seven thirty .At eight o'clock,my father and my mother eat breastfast.Then my father

帮我检查一下我写的这篇英语作文（初一的）“My family day”My family dayMy father usually gets up at six thirty.But my mother usually gets up at seven thirty .At eight o'clock,my father and my mother eat breastfast.Then my father
帮我检查一下我写的这篇英语作文（初一的）“My family day”
My family day
My father usually gets up at six thirty.But my mother usually gets up at seven thirty .At eight o'clock,my father and my mother eat breastfast.Then my father usually goes to work at eight thirty.My mother usually takes a shower at eight thirty.At nine o'clock,my father is still working,my mother shops for the vegetable .My father gets home at eleven o'clock.My mother goes to cook our lunch at eleven o'clock .In the afternoon,my father goes to work at fourteen o'clock ,and gets home at nineteen o'clock .My mother goes to work at thirteen o'clock and goes home at twenty o'clock.We usually eat dinner at twenty-one o'clock and go to bed at twenty-two o'clock.
文章的汉语内容就不用了,就看一下语法啊拼写啊,用法这些的,
我知道有点长，可是请大家认真一点检查。尤其这句“At nine o'clock,my father is still working,my mother shops for the vegetable ”
二楼，正是因为我写的英文作文不好所以才要练习、修改，我又不是因为要分数才写的。

帮我检查一下我写的这篇英语作文（初一的）“My family day”My family dayMy father usually gets up at six thirty.But my mother usually gets up at seven thirty .At eight o'clock,my father and my mother eat breastfast.Then my father
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At nine o'clock,my father is still working,my mother is shopping for the vegetable
其他应该都OK。
只是这篇流水账得不了高分吧

My father usually gets up at six thirty in the morning, but my mother does at seven thirty .At eight o'clock,my father and my mother start to have breakfast. Then my father goes to work at eight thirt...

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My father usually gets up at six thirty in the morning, but my mother does at seven thirty .At eight o'clock,my father and my mother start to have breakfast. Then my father goes to work at eight thirty. My mother often takes a shower at eight thirty. At nine o'clock,my father starts working, my mother shops for the vegetables .My father goes home at eleven o'clock. My mother cooks our lunch at eleven o'clock .In the afternoon,my father goes to work at fourteen o'clock ,and goes home again at nineteen o'clock .My mother goes to work at thirteen o'clock and goes home at twenty o'clock. We usually have dinner at twenty-one o'clock and go to bed at twenty-two o'clock

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直接说 shops vegetables,因为shop可以是及物动词，用shop for反而别扭。这句可以变为：when my father is still working at nine o'clock a.m.,my mother shops vegetables.或者my mom does vegetable shopping.
In the afternoon最好是At afternoon或At afternoons。
其他没有任何文法错误。

At nine o'clock,my father is still working,my mother shops for the vegetable 在my mother前面最好加个连词 ，and、 but、 while都可以。。。

No problem.

我认为正确