一小段英语描述,口语,帮改下错误把英语作业:做一个广告,自己设计然后在同学们面前介绍下面的就是画的图要描述的英文:the product that i choice is a Swiss sodafirst,i show you this drink.this is my drawi

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一小段英语描述,口语,帮改下错误把英语作业:做一个广告,自己设计然后在同学们面前介绍下面的就是画的图要描述的英文:theproductthatichoiceisaSwisssodafirst,isho

一小段英语描述,口语,帮改下错误把英语作业:做一个广告,自己设计然后在同学们面前介绍下面的就是画的图要描述的英文:the product that i choice is a Swiss sodafirst,i show you this drink.this is my drawi
一小段英语描述,口语,帮改下错误把
英语作业:做一个广告,自己设计然后在同学们面前介绍
下面的就是画的图
要描述的英文:
the product that i choice is a Swiss soda
first,i show you this drink.this is my drawing,we can see a bleu bottle ,this is a Swiss soda. this bottle is a little different than normal bottle.because its botteneck is long,the bottle is small for easly to bring(我觉得这句怪怪的), the bottle cap is black.
on the paper label,we can read its brand name:ENERGY,because when you drink this soda,u will fell power and get energy,we can also read a personified(拟人的) catchphrase:"Drink me!"
second.i will explain my choice of drawing. i draw 2 little girls,in fact they are same person ,we can see a different on the face :before ,she seems sleeply and her eyes are closed , but after she drink ,she is spirited.
the slogan is above the girls:"Energy,gives you more energy".this slogan have double meaning ,the frist words "energy"is brand name,and second words"energy"is effect of drink.
i choiced this drawing,because it seems funny and colorful,i used the manga style for characters to pay attention(我想说的是使用了漫画的风格,为了让它能更引人注意之类的)
帮我改下错把,语法问题,还有有些词重复了点,希望能改的比较流畅点
下面是老师希望我们写进去的东西,我觉得我写的不够多不是很仔细,所以希望在扩展一点,希望能帮我想一下别的东西,是和下面这些有关的
how it works?:
-most strinking element?
-lay out
-impact
-target
-feeling appeale to
conclusion:should the company use it?efficient?well-done?
不胜感激!

一小段英语描述,口语,帮改下错误把英语作业:做一个广告,自己设计然后在同学们面前介绍下面的就是画的图要描述的英文:the product that i choice is a Swiss sodafirst,i show you this drink.this is my drawi
解决了拼写和语法错误,对部分句子做了适当修改以达到简洁流畅的目的
The product I choose is a Swiss soda
First, let me show you my picture. As shown in the picture, the blue bottle on the left is the Swiss soda. You may have noticed that this bottle is slightly different from normal bottles, because it has a long bottleneck under the black cap. The bottle is small and is easy for carrying. 最后一句有点唐突
The label on the bottle shows its brand name: ENERGY. It has this named because of the power and energy you will feel after you drink it. At the bottom of the label, you can also find a personified(拟人的) (这词不好,太大了)catchphrase:"Drink me!"这里可以再解释一下
Next to the bottle, there are two pictures of the same little girl. As you can see the differences on her face: in the left one, she seems sleepy with her eyes closed, but after she drank the soda, she seems spirited in the picture on the right
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There is a slogan above the girls, says:"Energy, gives you more energy". Energy is a word with a double meaning, the first "energy" is the brand name, and the second one is the effect of the drink.
The reason why I choose the manga style is because it seems funny and vivid, and it is better to draw attention. (我想说的是使用了漫画的风格,为了让它能更引人注意之类的)
问题:
没写清楚这个设计中最有特色的地方(e.g. the girl),能起到什么效果(广告的),设计吸引什么人(e.g. 青少年)为什么饮料公司要采用你设计的广告(以上各点的结合)
BTW:这几年级的英语作业这么麻烦……